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Should children in the class be permitted to study more with computers and calculators or they should do it more with books. Do you agree or disagree give reasons to justify your answers.

Education is a rudimentary right of each and every student that decides the career of the student and of the country so the schools should be very conscious at the time of taking any decision, in
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 scenario allowing computers and calculators in the schools may lead to controversies. In
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 ever-changing technological world, technology is on the move and allowing students to use calculators and computers would be a step toward the future. Using gadgets in the study makes it easy to understand and learn in a faster, smarter and smoother way.
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, the students can easily access the content from all over the world and study it with the help of the internet and computers.
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,students can learn somethings via audio and visual effects on computers. By these gadgets,students can multitask. With the calculator,one can get accurate results of complex problems.
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 by studying through gadgets can release the burden of studies. It
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 has some drawbacks like incessantly using electronic gadgets like computers can affect the vision of young students. By using computers in study students will become technology dependant and it eventually leads to overall laziness that can affect mental strength of students. As the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, it can be concluded that the students should be allowed to use the computer and calculators for more studies rather than the books.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay โ€“ it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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