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In some countries, people prefer to rent a house for accommodation, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house . Dose renting a house have more advantages or disadvantages than buying a house ??

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The world nowadays
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 in term of economic
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 effect how habitats decide to
rent
 or owning
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house
 , in these assay
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 will
disscus
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discuss
 the
drowback
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drawback
 and benefit of
rent
 over ownership.
Rent
house
 have many unwanted points
firstly
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 way you can
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 much of many per year and on top of that you have no control on the place you leave it is hard to make any change without permission from
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ouse owner ,
this
 will tied hand and uncomfortable to some extend . In
other hand
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the good points about the
rent
house
is
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 it more convenient for kind of people there change the place where they live from time to time either due to work or any other reason,
furthermore
 buying
house
 require much of money for
first
 down-payment
although
 , its hundred
percent
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 more money saver than
rent
but
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in case having
these
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this first payment
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first
 payment . In conclusion
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rent
house
 could be
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 best choice for those not yet decide where to live for
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ong term and for those they do not have
the
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enough money to owning
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ouse.
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