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Some people think that air travel should grow without a limit, while others believe that governments should limit it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is common to use planes as a means of transportation when people
travel
 for a long distance. Some people argue that a trip by plane should expand unlimitedly, while others insist that governments should make a limitation to it. I will discuss both sides of views and conclude that government should regulate
air
travel
. It is true that
air
travel
 should develop without limitations because
this
 will boost countries’ economy. People
traveling
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 by plane enjoy their trips abroad while spending their money on accommodations and meals at local restaurants.
For example
, Okinawa, an island situated to the south of
main land
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 Japan, experiences a growing number of tourists coming from overseas by plane, and the tourism in the region brings about half of the revenue of the prefecture.
Therefore
,
air
travel
 without regulations will lead to stimulating the economy.
However
, I believe that governments should limit the
air
 trip since it causes serious
an
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environmental destruction,
such
 as
air
 pollution.
This
 is because planes emit a huge amount of toxic substances including smoke to fly huge objects. If governments do not regulate the frequency of
air
travel
,
this
 global problem will deteriorate, which leads to more people
s
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uffer from respiratory system diseases. In conclusion, while it is true that without limit of
air
travel
 has positive aspects, but I claim that there are other ways to develop countriesʼ economy and limitation of
air
 trip is necessary to keep our earth clean.
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