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Modern Communication means that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is argued that writing letters is no longer required because modern means of
communication
 have changed the way
people
 used to communicate. I completely agree with
this
 opinion that letter writing is not needed in
present
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 era as modern electronic gadgets
allows
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people
 to be in contact with
people
 in no matter of
time
 and
communication
 is flexible and alive too. OUTLINE SENTENCE TO ADD... First of all, Internet and Modern
communication
 applications like
Whatsapp
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, Gmail and Messenger ,
saves
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 our
time
 as they have made
communication
 faster and easier. Elaborating, in
this
 era,“
Time
 is Money” saving
time
 is the main priority of
people
 these days, and
hence
 smarter and faster
communication
 techniques using the
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 gadgets
has
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become a necessity.
For instance
, conventional telegram, which was a mode of
communication
 during yesteryears,
considered
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as
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the fastest used to take hours to reach its destination,
whereas
modern
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 “Telegram” app delivers
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the
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message
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 in seconds,
thus
 saving
time
 and money. Another point to consider is that
latest
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 approach
of
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communication
 has made the system more flexible and lively. To explain, earlier
people
 used to express their emotions through
writings
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 and the reader used to feel, but as of today 52% of the population spends their
time
 online,24x7,
hence
 a video call is the substitute to convey feelings live.
For example
, today even a soldier is allowed to video chat, from their base with
the
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family members and friends
thus
 reducing their homesickness to a large extent.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that modern
communication
 is better than
conventional
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 process of writing letters because the latter is definitely a
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time
 saving and a better way of transferring thoughts and feelings as the geographical boundaries are nullified by
the
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technology these days.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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