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People think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others believe that there are other alternative solutions for reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion on this topic.

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Some people argue that for the diminishing
crime
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 rate the excellent way is to stay offenders at a prison for a longer
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 period. Others say that different solutions can
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 be applied to tackle
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 issue. While the prolonged amount of
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 at prison hugely impacts on other offenders making them think twice before their action, I believe, that providing by a prison of regular
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 programs is able even more influence the society as well as the criminal activity in a positive way. On the one hand, if the rules had made stricter it would have influenced significantly other potential convicts, who are thinking either to do criminal actions or not. Non-sure people, who have just started to think about their doings may become scared about the possible
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 being arrested.
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, a report recently commissioned in Russia estimates that after the punishment for domestic violence was doubled in
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 in the 2018 year, the number of offenders has been declined to roughly 10% less than in years before the law refreshment.
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, introducing the
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 programs on a regular base is able to tackle the issue of the criminal rate from the long-term perspective.
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 programs can have a private format focused on a certain type of criminals. Programs aim to make offenders better citizens and suggest a chance to get the education or vocational training. Rehabilitated prisoners are considered less likely to be re-offend. To illustrate, the system of prisons in most of the states of the USA has already worldwide rewarded by other authorities for its results of downward the
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 rate. Due to the implementation of
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 programs since the 1900s the number of those who become re-offered sharply dropped to approximately 15%. To conclude, criminal isolation for a prolonged
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 span is able to become a trigger for others desired to commit a
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 not to do so.
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, there is another way to reduce
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 using the regular
rehabilitation
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 programs, which influence both the society as well as criminals themselves, encouraging to become them better people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • habitual offenders
  • retribution
  • rehabilitation
  • overcrowding
  • recidivism
  • community service
  • restorative justice
  • crime prevention programs
  • youth mentorship
  • neighborhood watch
  • justice system
  • re-offending
  • financial strain
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