Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include relevant examples from your experience.

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Nowadays, many people still have an occupation even after reaching retirement, and whilst some find

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situation common others consider it totally unnecessary. I somewhat agree the best option would be to not keep working when

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is elderly, but in most nations, the amount paid for retirement is not enough to pay all personal bills. On the

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hand, leaving a job allow retired people to enjoy a better life, as they will have more free time to spend with family, friends, to go on holidays, or even to get a new hobby.

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can discover a passion for dancing, swimming, writing, and so on.

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, given the choice to retire set people free from pushing themselves every day at work, somehow avoiding any injuries or illness.

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, choosing to quit a job and relying on retirement money may be a risk if not well planned, because most people use to spend more than the amount earned, and it can bring a lack of money.

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situation usually leaves no choice but to get back to work and make more money to survive.

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, there are some cases where working to pay basic needs are not essential. To illustrate, my father has a good savings account to cover his expenses,

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, he chose to go on with his business because he loves what he does for a living. In conclusion, I somewhat believe the ones in elderly age should not be working anymore, but only spending their time resting or going on vacations.

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is not always possible given the economic situation faced in most countries,

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it is necessary that each

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analyse their own financial condition to decide what is better to do.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

291 words

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retirement
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