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You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, explain your situation describe your problems tell him/her when you think you can move in

#move #apartment #month #course #provider #situation
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 request letter regarding shifting to
new
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 rental apartment. My name is Kailash Kamble and I am
student
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a student
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of
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 your institute
since
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for
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last
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the last
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 1 year. College
also
 allotted
hostel
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a hostel
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 facility to me for 2 years because I had applied it for during
admission
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 process. It was
good
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a good
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 decision to have
hostel
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a hostel
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 facility. Since
,
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 I need personal
some
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apply
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space and time for my final examination preparation I am planning
for
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to
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shift
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the shift
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 to a rental apartment along with my one friend. As per
earlier
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an earlier
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 conversation with you by
an
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apply
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email
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,email
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 it
confirmed
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was confirmed
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 from both
side
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 that
next
month
 will be my
last
month
 in
hostel
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the hostel
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 and
per
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I have already finished
formalities
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the formalities
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. Accidently in
last
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the last
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 week
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I fall down from
staircase
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the staircase
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. After professional medical consulting it is found that there is a crack develop in my knee bone and it is strongly
recommnded
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recommended
complete
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to complete
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 bed rest for a
month
.
Hence
, I have no other option left that does not mean
i
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I
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 change my plan but just need
one
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one-month
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month
extention
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extension
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 to handle
this
 serious situation. I will complete
extra
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the extra
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documentaion
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documentation
 process if
any
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apply
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required
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is required
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. Looking
forword
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forward
 for reply Your's faithfully, Kailash Kamble
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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