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The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In the modern era, pupil mostly
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spending
 a time on their phones or television to watch any movies or web series but
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ounger generation.
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 some people wants to the government should control
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the violence movies or television series to stop the crime in
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orld. It will be discussing in
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ext paragraphs.
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, the violent films are
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ad impact on
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ew generation because the growing children learn easily
everthing
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everything
 and some times they personally try on them
for example
, if any young boy saw any violent movie like killing people with firearms or weapons, that things sometimes force to
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hild to use
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 in real life.
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, violent movies make easier for the bad people like robbers or thief to plan
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bad things like murder or robbing in
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ouse because
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 these type movies teach or give them
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new ideas to finish
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, India's most popular movie like
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 is based on
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obbery that gives so many ideas to robbers to rob something.
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, where people live
thier
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their
 life in hectic
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schedule
 if they will happy to see any
action thriller
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 movies or television series it would not that bad impact on them because mostly pupil use their
televisons
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televisions
television
 or movie
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 for entertainment and if any two hours movies creating a bad people in the world it would be more difficult to live in the society.
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 the end, where some people think
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violent movies are just for
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entertainment, there are
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society. It is better for everyone and for
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ew generation if the government stop the action and thriller movies to stop the violence in the world.
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