Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. What is your own opinion?

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outh of today's world are more involved in taking care of these matters than ever before .
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more aware and taking various steps to resolve these issues .
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outh of today's world are more aware
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importance of
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tudy . Education is the key to solve most of
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person know the reason behind environmental issues and poverty
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other people in the society about
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to clean different cities of
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tate and that approach
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by other young people and they start
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them to make cities green .
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