Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. What is your own opinion?

It is commonly believed that the younger
generation
knows and thinks of the problems
such
as damages done to the ecology, challenges regarding low-income societies and issues related to animal care more than adults. In my opinion, while young people might be
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interested and involved in actions for
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environmental protection and the defence of animal rights,
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poverty occurs to be mainly in the consideration of
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lder
generation
. There is an upward tendency in the awareness levels on environmental challenges and increased interest in animal protection amongst teenagers and youngsters.
In other words
, the youth, nowadays, is more engaged in the protesting campaigns of environmentalists and animal right defenders held against devastating ecology, the detrimental effects of industry on nature.
Furthermore
, the apparent severe consequences of high usage rates of natural resources and the ignorant approach to the animals are the other targets of their struggles.
Therefore
, they tend to do research, find out negative results of recent tremendous changes in,
for instance
, forest sizes, clean water percentages or death rates of animals.
Moreover
, they analyze the root reasons
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these problems and share their activities via
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social networking websites.
On the other hand
, people living during the previous decades seem to be far more aware of the poverty and desperate conditions of the ones living in
such
awful situations. One of the reasons of it can be the welfare terminating results of wars, various
cataclisms
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cataclysms
, some types of crisis experienced by them, as the vast majority of the members of
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revious
generation
saw the World War II, some of them lived during the World War I and even a few of them were amongst the participants of those wars.
Secondly
, by having a longer life experience they tend to have more knowledge about families of the low-income category of society. They may even have lived in
such
conditions for during some difficult periods of their lives. In conclusion,
although
youngsters and teenagers are active participants of eco-friendly movement or animal-right protectors and seem to know more of these issues, the older
generation
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poor life.
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