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some parents allow their children to use smartphones or tablets for learning.Do the advantages of this trend outwigh the disadantages

#parents #children #smartphones #tablets #trend #outwigh #disadantages
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There is no denying the fact that
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dvancement of technology is playing a vital role in
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tudent’s life.
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the reason that parents allow their children to
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 tablets and smartphones for their study purposes. Some people argue that
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 trend has numerous advantages over its disadvantages. On the whole
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I disagree with
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, I think that electronic gadgets can polish the hidden talents of students up to some extent.
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ong time. It has been noticed that these days, children spend a lot of time in front of computer or laptops rather than playing outdoor activities. If children will not participate in games
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hance to kill their extra calories.
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, they have to suffer from medical problems because of their sedentary lifestyle.
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 can distract children from their studies. It seems that when student
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 cellphones, perhaps, they would start to
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 more social sites as well to play games, which seems very enjoyable to them.
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 their academic performance.
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, in future, they would feel difficulty in order to find
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ob.
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, new ways of learning may polish inside
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alents of students. It appears that if students
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 electronic gadgets for learning, might be they will develop new software or websites for games or social sites which can be beneficial for the world. Taking an example of a student namely Rajesh who belong to
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orth part of India. In 2002, he made a website for his school when he was in his eighth grade. It was
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eally great success for him in his early age which he got because he always
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 smartphones or laptops for his studies. In conclusion, if students
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 technological devices for their learning it may affect
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their health or studies
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ew direction to children .
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