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In some countries people spend long hours at work. Why does this happen? Is it positive or negative development

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There are some countries in the world where a job keeps employees longer than
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 time requires. It may be the cause of high pressure and complicated tasks or simply desire to earn more money. All these causes are obviously negative developments. For starters, overworking is witnessed due to a lot of tasks to deal with and their complexity. People who
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 in big companies are required to do many tasks,
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, if their colleague got cold, a boss might put on the rest of the stuff those deals.
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, employees have to overcome not only their
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 but
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 that makes
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 even difficult. To illustrate, recent research in Japan show that during the pandemic many people were ought to take more tasks due to the illness of their workmates,
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, soon difficulty and pressure of plenty of assignments forced employees to stay longer in their workplaces,
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, some of them even got
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 problems as insomnia. Another thing is that for the sake of earning more money people would stay at
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 longer. It is common knowledge that people tend to earn as much as it is possible owing to family duties or their own life goals.
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, in Pakistan, people live in big families,
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, wives usually take care of children,
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, husbands have to
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 longer on their jobs in order to show a boss their loyalty and
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, increase the salary. In conclusion, some of the countries around the globe have people working until late.
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 mostly because of tough tasks,
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 pressure, and simply need to get a higher salary. Due to some health problems that may appear, the
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 of working late is negative.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalent
  • economic pressures
  • financial stability
  • competitive job markets
  • corporate cultures
  • stigma
  • demonstrate dedication
  • advent of technology
  • blurred the lines
  • accelerated career progression
  • dedicated employee
  • significant negative implications
  • stress levels
  • mental health
  • physical health
  • social and family time
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • flexible working hours
  • work-life balance
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