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Some people say that Government should break down all the historic building and replace them with modern buildings. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #buildings
It is an undeniable fact that historic buildings are the greatest asset for a country or a
city
. It is quite surprising that some people want to break them down and replace
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ith modern buildings. I totally disagree with them because historic sites always exhibit our old civilization, generate money, and helpful to learn the great glory of our ancestors . To support our historical places, we should maintain them like our homes as they represent the history of that
city
 or country.
For example
, Taj Mahal is the seventh wonder of the world. It is a symbol of true love and a great source of inspiration for a new artist. People took several years to build
this
 beautiful site. It teaches us a lot of different things
such
 as which kind of material is used , what technology, how did it get build in those many years etc. These are learning lesson for the current and future generation. People can study them and build a new masterpiece.
Furthermore
, these sites are helpful to generate revenue for the local authority. Like, there is Red fort in Delhi, every year lot of tourists come over to see the unique fort in the world. They buy tickets to see these places and stay in the
city
 which ultimately generate a source of income. And
also
, tourism gives
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ob to the local people without wasting our history. To sum up all various benefits, we should try to preserve them as long as possible. You can always build new fancy buildings which reflect the same like we copied from another
city
. There is no uniqueness on which you can feel proud of your
city
. We should feel great
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about
 them as it reflects the great glory of our ancestors who had contributed their lives to make it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable assets
  • tangible connection
  • architectural heritage
  • modernization
  • energy efficiency
  • adaptive reuse
  • historical significance
  • economic implications
  • sustainable
  • green technologies
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