More and more young people from wealthy countries are spending a short time doing unpaid work such as teaching or building houses for communities in poorer countries. Why young people choose to do so? Who will benefit more: young people or the communities?

Nowadays, young generations are full of energy and enthusiasm, they are
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acquiring
quality education and helping other small communities by teaching them or building houses because they
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to backward and poor countries. While
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there are several reasons behind
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which is advantageous for both communities and young people in
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ifferent way.
Firstly
, young people are aware of global
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economic
crisis and its major
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consequences
on poor countries, these people are taking initiative to improve their backward condition
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because
they have funds and resources which can make
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possible.
Secondly
, young people
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internal satisfaction and happiness while helping others, and took participation in
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rganisation and charitable clubs which are helping millions of
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people
worlwide
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worldwide
by
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proving
providing
them food, shelter and education.
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, UNICEF and UNESCO are
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organisation recently contributed
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itself
in 52million hunger people in Africa by giving them
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healthy
and food and houses and
this
organisation are led maximum by young people. At present, young generation finds trouble in getting
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jobs and they are
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fascinated
towards their own startups.
Thus
, young people with wealthy
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background
started teaching
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people
and some of them are investing in building houses for poor people.
Thus
, it benefits young
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people
being helping hands for poor people.
on the other hand
people with help of young people, small communities can
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acquire knowledge and get
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blissful
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life to live. In conclusion, young people are helping small communities with different purposes and in return
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it is benefiting small communities as they get
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hance to learn and
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monetary
support can help them to build their houses.
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