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The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this

#generations #people #life
Our grandparents lived their
life
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 in a traditional way and their way of thinking towards
life
 is not modern and they always preferred to live
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imple
life
 with no extra demands. While some opine that, their ideas and thoughts are not useful for young generations to cope with today's world. I agree with
this
 opinion to a great extend. On the one hand, our ancestors lived in a cultural environment where they tend to live simply without any electronic devices or any other digital technology.
Thus
, their requirements are very less as compare to young people.
However
, older generations
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 not think about being rich and live
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uxurious
life
 because their happiness lies within their family and society and they do not want to go out of
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eague.
On the other hand
,
life
 has completely changed for young people, now there is no similarity in ancient and modern
life
,
thus
 old thinking and way of living would not help young people to live their
life
 with all modern perks.
For example
, elder people have
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omplete schedule which they follow in their daily routine woke up early and they go to bed early, but at present young
generation
 cannot match
this
 because of studies and some
beacuse
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because
 of their job shifts.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, people in past are very helpful and they live together happily in one society, but for now
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things
has
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 changed, daily crimes and competition among communities are high,
thus
 to live in modern
generation
 one has to be alert and blunt to be ahead of
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rowd. In conclusion, there is no denying that
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lder
generation
have
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 strong decision making power and their experience and guidance will be helpful in our
life
. But, it is evident that
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oung
generation
 cannot match with old thinking and standard of living because of modernization.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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