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Most newspapers today publish more advertisements than concrete news, unlike in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development?

#newspapers #advertisements #news #development
These days advertisement has been given more importance than news in the newspaper. In my opinion, news plays a major in the development of
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 deviating the importance of the news that needs to be brought in to the
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 . I will be highlighting the points to support, how commercials are creating
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 the development of the country. Advertisements
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 a major role for the companies to showcase their products in the form of advertising. It is the one way of attracting buyers for the products.
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, most of the time the products are been misleading to the consumers, and the huge investment is involved in publishing the advertisement in the newspaper which has
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ead cost of the newspaper has been increased tremendously.
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, Commercials related to air-conditioning had additional features, whereas when people bought the product it led to the disappointment to them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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