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Population in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the advantage and disadvantages of this approach.

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Many people believe that we need to adopt Genetically Modified crops to fulfil the growing need for
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 grains as the population has been increasing at an alarming rate in developing countries.
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 grain requirement. To illustrate, agriculture land is decreasing as new roads and residential colonies are being built to accommodate people in progressing economies.
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, as per a recent “The HIND” newspaper report, the population of Punjab has increased
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approximately 50
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per cent
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ast 30 years, while agriculture land has reduced 20
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 during
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 period.
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 data is shocking and alarming as well as more
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 grain is required now.
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, people are adopting
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 new practice.
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primary drawback of GM crops is that, though GM crops satisfy
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 requirement of society but are unable to fill the nourishment needs of an individual as the composition of vitamins, minerals and other nutrients are reduced due to the excessive use of chemicals and fertilizer in
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 crops
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 lose its basic taste as well as quality.
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, many people these days are facing vitamins and minerals deficiency due to the consumption of
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. In nutshell, the pro of turning towards GM crops is, it satisfies the
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 requirements of increased population, which
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 is a challenging situation whereas the main cons are that it lacks nourishment and with the regular uses of
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 developed through GM practices, the immune system of a person will be compromised .
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