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In recent years, tourists have paid attention to preserving both the culture and environment of the places they visit. However, some people think that it is impossible to be a responsible tourist. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The tourism industry has boomed in the past decade but is somewhat suffering due to the ongoing pandemic. Tourism is now playing a prominent role in thriving businesses and pushing the economy.Some countries like Dubai, Thailand are heavily dependent on the visitor for their economic activities. Awareness amongst tourists has increased to preserve the places they visit, culturally and environmentally. As every coin has two sides,
this
 one has it's too. Many people degrade the culture and the beautiful environment.
Firstly
, there have been many incidents that prove, not all visitor intends to harm nature. Due to a group of persons not valuing the local customs of the destination doesn't mean everyone is not respectful. A report from NDTV magazine claimed that around 95% of tourist try not to damage the place.
For example
 - I have been to many places across the globe but our group never tries to exploit any natural resources at the destination.
However
,not all tourists are the same. Not all people care about saving the culture and nature of a place. There is a saying for these kinds of people, "where there is a city there will be trash". The concept of a responsible traveller is a myth for many.Many opinions of mass support that it is really difficult to become a responsible traveller.
For example
 - While travelling around the world, I have crossed so many wanderers that don't follow the necessary protocols. I would disagree with the fact that it is impossible to be a responsible tourist due to those facts provided above and a few personal experiences. The essay provides enough explanation of both the topics and relevant past experiences.
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