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Some people say that the bicycles are a good, modern means of transportation. Other say riding a bicycle has clear disadvantages. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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Few individuals believe, bicycles are new , an excellent form of
transport
 whereas, others believe riding cycles has limitations. In my opinion, bicycles are considered to be affordable and modern means of travel I will be highlighting the points, how bicycles are taken to the account of transportation in a better way, and at the same time, I will
also
 discuss drawbacks of bicycles. Pedal cycles are considered to be the most convenient and affordable form of
transport
. The main reason is the maintenance and repairs of the cycles are quite cheaper and cost-effective when compared to the other vehicles. It is
also
 very economical and budgets friendly to purchase a cycle. Pedal cycles can be used by irrespective of age and
needs
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 no license to run
this
 particular mode of
transport
.
Additionally
, people
also
 consider it as a fitness regime.
For example
,
instead
 of walking and jogging nowadays, people use cycles for their exercise. it not only helps in work out and
moreover
 helps them to keep fit There
are
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also
 a limitation
in
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 the bicycles. It cannot be used for
long
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distance
. It is always effective to be used for the shorter
distance
. Traveller tends to get tired, any physical injury or accidents if it is used for
long
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distance
.
Additionally
, riding a bicycle needs balance, misbalance of traveller would lead to accidents and injury .
For example
, many cyclists lose their life due to improper balance or skid bicycles on the road In Conclusion, bicycles are
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cheapest and less expensive mode of shipping. it not only helps in improving the health of the traveller but
also
 very budget-friendly . It can be used by any age group and no license is required using it.
However
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it cannot be used for the far
distance
 and there is a major chance of accidents with bicycles. I believe bicycles have more pros than cons so it is one of the most effective modes of
transport
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