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. In some countries, people waste a lot of the food that they buy in shops and restaurants. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem

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In many nations,
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waste
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 has exponentially soared. The main reasons, in my opinion, are the affordability of
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 at shops and restaurants
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 reasonable prices in tandem with the short shelf life of
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 ready-made
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, governments can ameliorate
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waste
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 rise through effective strategies. Regarding the causes, because of the hectic life people lead now, they have to work extra time.
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, they tend to purchase their meals because they do not have enough time to cook. Once they can buy their daily meals
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 low price in comparison to cooked ones, they buy more than they already need.
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 results in huge quantities of
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waste
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. Another contributory factor is despite the artificial additives to preserve pre-prepared
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onger period, many dishes are spoiled even if they are kept properly. Due to any change in taste or texture of
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,
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 and its leftover are eventually disposed
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 In order to mitigate
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 rise in
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waste
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, governments should set strict plans. One of the most essential steps
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 launching awareness campaigns. Having known that dumping
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 results in scarcity of
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 resources as well as famine on the long-term, they will reduce either their consumption or their disposal. Another beneficial approach is imposing more taxes on processed
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. If people have to pay more while purchasing ready meals, they will change their dietary habits to cooked-meals.
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, their
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waste
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 will be limited as they cook wisely according to their needs. To conclude, I believe that
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 the massive rise in
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waste
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 is a consequence of low priced
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 aligned with its short validity period, governments can tackle
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 issue by awareness campaigns and more taxes
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