The government should not waste money on arts as this money would be better spent on other projects like sanitation or infrastructure. Do you agree with the above statement?

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I completely agree that bringing in projects that help our
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to maintain cleanliness and making sure that the groundwork is enhanced should be chosen over an
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project. Discussing
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, how it will help in coping up with diseases followed by how it will attract more tourists. Maintaining
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hygiene in public places is as important as maintaining it in our own homes. For an example, here in India
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we see that the roads flood in the rainy season as the sewage system has not been maintained which can cause diseases like viral infections or
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of body allergy as
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water is not clean and
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, should be a basic necessity that the government should look after.
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, we see that roads are not clean as well and there is lack of dustbins in public areas because of which people litter the roads,
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overnment should work on projects that
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these requirements for the citizens. The whole framework
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needs maintenance to keep the
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functioning in a strategized way. All areas getting
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upply of water and electricity should be a priority.
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, maintenance of roads and buildings is essential and a key factor to attract tourists.
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, tourism will help our economy as well,
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enefits of which can
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go towards projects that help citizens in some way. To give a clear example, when we travel to a different
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, we are impressed how well maintained every area in that
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, we should
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take measures to deliver the same when they visit our
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. To summarize,
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overnment of any
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should
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make sure that the normal requirements are fulfilled like sanitation and infrastructure and
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