Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Sports
have been the longest method of fitness or staying healthy. Use synonyms
However
, a few people are interested in Linking Words
sports
and activities that are more hazardous in nature. In my opinion, I think that young people get attracted to Use synonyms
such
events to seek new thrills and Linking Words
being
brave.
Wrong verb form
be
Firstly
, some youngsters are very curious Linking Words
in
the ways of nature and like to explore it in a more adventurous way. Change preposition
about
Hence
, they begin a trail of activities that can provide a new experience and bring a thrill Linking Words
in
the adventure. Change preposition
to
Sports
like mountain biking Use synonyms
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for
instance, where the cyclist rides down the edge of hills off-terrain, is Add the comma(s)
, for
such
an action that causes danger to the rider, as some feel that Linking Words
this
thrilling feel is their adrenaline.
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Secondly
, sets of youngsters join or begin these kinds of sportive actions to demonstrate bravery. Linking Words
This
can be seen in videos where young men or women run and jump over tall buildings without a harness or any support. They often record their feats in order to showcase their abilities and get compliments from seeds and peers. To cite an example, stunts like parkour and free running are aimed at getting from one point to another in a complex and difficult environment, without assistive equipment.
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To conclude
, youngsters are living the fullest of their dreams Linking Words
participating
in these wild Change preposition
by participating
sports
, with some of them being successful and famous. Use synonyms
Although
there is deep and immense fun in adventurous and courageous physical activity, they should Linking Words
also
consider Linking Words
to be
precautious Change the verb form
being
while
entering, to avoid endangerment.Linking Words
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task response
Ensure to directly address all parts of the essay prompt in a clear and organized manner. Work on providing a more balanced view by discussing potential risks or drawbacks of dangerous sports.
coherence and cohesion
The essay demonstrates a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frame the discussion. Consider enhancing the transitions between ideas to improve overall coherence.