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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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One of the most conspicuous trends of today's worlds is an ongoing debate among people about what sells faster: look or the
quality
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 of the service delivered by the
employee
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. While there are arguements in favour of both, I believe that the
quality
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 matters most when it comes to the delivery of the product or the service. Some people believe that appearance sells faster, be it for a product or a service
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 being offered by an
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 of an
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.
This
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 means that the
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 working for the
organisation
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 should dress appropriately and smartly to convey the brand value of the company.
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, if a salesman from BMW brand is dressed casually, and he makes a salespitch to the prospective customer, the customer may not give proper attention to the salesman owing to his unprofessional attire.
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,
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 an
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 may not have a good dressing sense, he can utilise some of his other skills to enhance the
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 of
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. Taking the same example as above, the salesman can
work
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 on his communication and interpersonal skills to build a good relationship with the customer, and
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 will help him to increase the number of sales of the cars.
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, the
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 could benefit more if it focuses on
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 of
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 produced than how well an
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 dresses up. To conclude,
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 well dressed employees enhance the brand value of the company, in my view, it is the
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 of
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 that attracts more customers, leading to an increase in the sales revenue of the
organisation
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.
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