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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today's worlds is an ongoing debate among people about what sells faster: look or the
quality
 of the service delivered by the
employee
. While there are arguements in favour of both, I believe that the
quality
 matters most when it comes to the delivery of the product or the service. Some people believe that appearance sells faster, be it for a product or a service
that is
 being offered by an
employee
 of an
organisation
.
This
 means that the
employee
 working for the
organisation
 should dress appropriately and smartly to convey the brand value of the company.
For example
, if a salesman from BMW brand is dressed casually, and he makes a salespitch to the prospective customer, the customer may not give proper attention to the salesman owing to his unprofessional attire.
On the other hand
,
although
 an
employee
 may not have a good dressing sense, he can utilise some of his other skills to enhance the
quality
 of
work
. Taking the same example as above, the salesman can
work
 on his communication and interpersonal skills to build a good relationship with the customer, and
this
 will help him to increase the number of sales of the cars.
Therefore
, the
organisation
 could benefit more if it focuses on
quality
 of
work
 produced than how well an
employee
 dresses up. To conclude,
although
 well dressed employees enhance the brand value of the company, in my view, it is the
quality
 of
work
 that attracts more customers, leading to an increase in the sales revenue of the
organisation
.
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