In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years. Do you agree?

In these days,
power
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play
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very important role in the system, irrespective of the fields. Being in the society which dominates the people who are higher position, it becomes very difficult to change after
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ertain period of
time
. In
this
essay, I will
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the points , and
also
disagree on changing authorities after certain life-span.
To begin
with,
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are always individuals who think
power
is an important role, irrelevant of the fields they belong to . In certain areas like politics, government and business, even though the pathetic is the control with the help of these
power
they become more powerful , sometimes it
also
creates
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onopoly in certain places , it becomes very difficult to start any new venture as they dominate it.
For example
, In
bollywood
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always the star kids have been
casted
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in the famous directors, irrespective of their talent. They have purely got the movies based on the nepotism , and the outsiders struggle for their movies, even though if they get chance they have been given a role of supporting actor.
Secondly
, Few
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has made commendable progress in the fields and people would like to continue the same irrespective of the span.
For Instance
, In politics, Narendra
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has got
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evelopment of the country , which in return he was again appointed as the Prime Minister of India. Whenever there is any positive improvement people would like to contribute and support. Suppose any
time
limit is been implied , it becomes very difficult for party or government to understand their area of
activites
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activities
activity
, by the
time
they are making any progress the
time
limit comes to an end. In
Conculsion
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Conclusion
, Some people are bound to
ruled
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by the help of
power
or any other
infulence
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influence
and few other people needs to be ruled with the amount of work
that is
been done for the country. So
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disagree on the fact, it needs to be changed
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