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You play a team sports with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn’t able to play with you at that weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won. describe the conditions on the day. say how you felt about the match

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Dear Ravi, Hope you are doing great and recovering well. I have a bit of bad news regarding
the
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last
 weekend's cricket match which
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 place
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 the Robert Cricket Ground. It was eventually a bad
day
 for our team, as we lost the match
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 5 runs only. Perhaps
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 were silly mistakes which
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 taken the game from our hands. On that
day
 we won the toss and decided to ball first. Our bowlers did an exceptional job and bowled out the opposition at a low total of 225 runs in 50 overs.
Then
 we started with some early wickets but the middle order batsmen have played really well. Mayur had played a vital role in the batting, as soon as he got out our team bowled out at 219 runs only. I really feel bad about that
day
. I think if you
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 been playing on that
day
 our opening batting order could
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 more stable with
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 skills.
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 get well soon and join the team. Best regards, Harsh
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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