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When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices. Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details.

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With the globalisation, the trend of individuals immigrating to other countries has increased. Some of the people adapt to the customs and traditions of the
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 in which they have shifted to,
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the others stick with their native
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I would like to delve into both the choices before forming an opinion. There is an old saying that be a Roman when in Rome. When one immigrate to the other
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, following the local traditions and
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 helps the natives to get comfortable with that immigrant, and
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 aid the individual's socio-economic growth.
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 when a
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 starts business in any foreign
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 if that
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 is aware of the local
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 the people of that place get more comfortable with him.
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that
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 is entrusted with business dealings as well by locals.
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 adapting to the proverb mentioned above has a lot in the overall growth of a
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, there are certain people who keep on following their native customs and traditions even in foreign countries. When they practice their values and beliefs in synchronisation with the local
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, it helps the natives to better understand their traditions. It
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 helps in earning the respect of natives for their
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 and values as they act as representatives of their
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 To conclude with, I am of the opinion that even though adapting to the customs and traditions of the new society, helps in a
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 but one should follow his own
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 in a foreign
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 but should respect the
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 n traditions of locals as well. As it will make bring both the societies in harmony by making the natives understand their beliefs.
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