The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is saying that

health

is wealth and in my opinion, it is worth giving importance to

health

than the money.

Furthermore

, it is always true that prevention is better than cure.

Hence

, I totally agree with the fact that we have to be cautious about our fitness from the very beginning.

Firstly

, it is of utmost importance that one should take care of his/her well-being properly. Adding

this

, everyone should have regular checkups so that if there is some wrong finding, it could be cured

then

only.

Moreover

, I strongly believe that a good diet, exercise, and a positive attitude leads to an able-bodied person.

On the other hand

, good dietary supplements should

also

be consumed daily to fill the nutritional gap in our food.

Secondly

, the Government should

also

focus on the

health

of the masses. For

this

, it is taking considerable steps to educate people regarding their

health

For instance

, many campaigns have been organised by different authorities of the

Health

Department like polio campaign, free vaccination for measles and Rubella, Covid-19 awareness program, etc. The Government is taking all the preventative steps for the people. I agree with the fact that proper funding should reflect

this

cause. Though,

besides

all the efforts, there is lack of resources among the commoners because they did not get the proper help from the officials due to some corrupt agents who misuses the money for their own benefit rather using it for the welfare of society. In conclusion, the Indian Government should hire the more reliable authorities to focus on the well-being of the citizens and all the preventative measures should be taken like sanitization, segregation of garbage, free body check-ups, general awareness regarding consumption of organic food and diet, and so on.

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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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