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Nowadays people are affected by social media and internet. Is it a good or bad trend in your opinion? Explain it by giving your own example.

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Social media and
internet
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 become an important and integral part
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 our daily lives. These days people are getting impacted by social media and
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nternet which is the best friend in my opinion. Can social media and
internet
 actually affect people in any which way? Yes, it can have a huge impact which may
pertains
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 to anything we don't even consider bothering. Though we may get attracted to that thing or person or activity or event.
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 influence is creating more problems than solutions
such
 as. Animosity - Social media platform enables the user to be flamboyant in order to put oneself at
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igher position than others which creates a sense of jealousy and hatred in each other. Omnipresence - The traceability of
internet
 has even increased crimes and other mishappenings in public because everybody has an update on their current place and position which helps the other to materialise things easily. Divide and rule - Social media has been the platform with enormous users which enables them to put their point but
also
 to ridicule the other one which increases the division more harshly. I would like to state one of my own example where I was drawn in a conversation of my friend over communal events which distanced me with my friend from that day onwards.
therefore
 it is a back trend with half realities and bleak futuristic approach.
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