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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The past has always been considered as a guiding light in taking important decisions. It is believed by some that one can learn a great deal from past experiences while some
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otherwise
. I believe
history
 can be a valuable source of information that can aid in deciding about various choices in
life
,
however
, sometimes it becomes difficult to learn anything from the past in resolving the newer and unique problems of 21st century. On the one hand, the knowledge of past failures is more valuable than the stories of success for oneself.
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, buying a car on a bank loan can be a risky decision
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, in order to calculate the risk
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in
this
 case, the past experience of somebody else or oneself can be of great help in the process of weighing the risk factors. The stories of failure from
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history
 can teach a person some lessons which will be
usefull
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useful
 in taking important
life
 decisions.
On the contrary
,
history
 can be of very little or no use in some problems which are unique in nature. As problems which are never seen before requires out of the box thinking in deciding its mitigation measures. For
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instance
, the great war in 1942,
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churchill
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 face a very peculiar problem of army blockade by the enemies which required new unique measures to deal measures to save the
life
 of 1,00,000 trapped
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 troops. Overall, according to my understanding
history
 can assist and guide a person in
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ajority of his/her
life
 decisions
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however
, there are numerous challenges that are one of its kind, which nobody has ever faced before. The parents must teach their children the importance of
history
 and most importantly the failure lessons but
also
 educate them to not rely on it completely in
life
.
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