Nowadays larger distances are travelled by people to work and study on a daily basis. Some consider it to be a negative development, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays an increasing number of people has been studying and working far from their home, so they travel larger distances to reach their companies or universities. While some people believe
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is a negative development, others think
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is an improvement.
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essay will discuss both sides and present arguments to explain why I agree with the former opinion. On the one hand, some people believe when someone travels long distances to work or study
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means it is a result of development.
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is because they think that cities are more connected nowadays than it was in the past and it shows improvements.
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, you can work in a city while you live in another city.
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, there are numerous ways to reach far locations due to recent improvements in public transportation.
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, they believe that by accepting jobs far from home, you can have more options and,
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, can help in personal growth.
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, others think that travelling larger distances to work or study may be a threat to health. I personally, agree with
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idea because people are spending more time in transportation and,
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, they have less time to practice some physical activity. Not only have they less opportunity to practice a sport, but
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they have less free time. I believe it is extremely important to have moments to do leisure activities,
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as go to the movies or to a club. To conclude, I think travelling longer distances are a threat to our health, even though some people believe it may bring more opportunities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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