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3. Successful companies use advertisements to make more sales. What can make an advertisement effective? Do you think advertisements are a bad thing or a good thing for society?

#companies #advertisements #sales #advertisement #society
Great companies come up with creative advertisements in order to increase their revenues on a regular basis. In my opinion
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advertisements that have a creative touch usually
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ublic which could drive more sales. While
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odern economy, I find them creating more harm than good lately. Given how over-crowded the
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advertisements
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 could lead to massive improvements
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 the top line of company P & L s and there have been scenarios where a single
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with the emergence of
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 have started to intrude our day to day lives in a forceful manner. Most of these
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 get played whether you like them or not and some of them are not appropriate in nature for all audiences.
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these
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 could have negative
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 on kids who spend a lot of time
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 and on the internet. I sincerely hope some form of regulations will come in to play in advertising space so it could be back it where it was a decade ago or so.
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