Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. To what extent do you agree.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Education is the key to success and it helps a person to create his mind for good and bad things. As per the study, it is believed that most of the criminal offences are performed by less educated people. For
this
Linking Words
reason, I agree with the fact that education is worth giving in prison, so that the prisoner may get a job after the completion of the punishment. Going deeper, the reason behind the wrongful action is the lack of a healthy mindset. If the person is educated enough
then
Linking Words
only he/she can understand what is good or what is bad for themselves.
Moreover
Linking Words
, a good education can lead to a good lifestyle.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, giving proper guidance to a prisoner can give an individual strength to deal with the fact that whatever he has done was not right and from now onwards he/she will not do any
such
Linking Words
offence. But somehow,
this
Linking Words
fact cannot be denied that we can see some highly qualified people doing criminal deeds.
For instance
Linking Words
, the owner of the brand, Kingfisher, caught in money laundering case which is a crime.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, we have seen many filmstars being involved in drugs and breaking all the rules. All these people were literate. Now let us
also
Linking Words
discuss less-educated guys. We all must have heard about 'Nirbhaya' case, all the boys involved in the cruelty were not from a good background. They all got death sentence as a punishment but one of them was minor, so he was released from jail after some time. He was given guidance in the jail about how he can be a good person and options of what he can do after his prison is over. Concluding
this
Linking Words
, as we can see crime can grow anywhere or in any field, it is
also
Linking Words
important to focus on positive attitude, good habits, and general behaviour than teaching them books only.
Although
Linking Words
I am in favour of higher studies in imprisonment, I
also
Linking Words
support psychological help.
Submitted by sscnwrldc on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: