Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. To what extent do you agree.

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Education is the key to success and it helps a person to create his mind for good and bad things. As per the study, it is believed that most of the criminal offences are performed by less educated people. For

this

reason, I agree with the fact that education is worth giving in prison, so that the prisoner may get a job after the completion of the punishment. Going deeper, the reason behind the wrongful action is the lack of a healthy mindset. If the person is educated enough

then

only he/she can understand what is good or what is bad for themselves.

Moreover

, a good education can lead to a good lifestyle.

Furthermore

, giving proper guidance to a prisoner can give an individual strength to deal with the fact that whatever he has done was not right and from now onwards he/she will not do any

such

offence. But somehow,

this

fact cannot be denied that we can see some highly qualified people doing criminal deeds.

For instance

, the owner of the brand, Kingfisher, caught in money laundering case which is a crime.

On the other hand

, we have seen many filmstars being involved in drugs and breaking all the rules. All these people were literate. Now let us

also

discuss less-educated guys. We all must have heard about 'Nirbhaya' case, all the boys involved in the cruelty were not from a good background. They all got death sentence as a punishment but one of them was minor, so he was released from jail after some time. He was given guidance in the jail about how he can be a good person and options of what he can do after his prison is over. Concluding

this

, as we can see crime can grow anywhere or in any field, it is

also

important to focus on positive attitude, good habits, and general behaviour than teaching them books only.

Although

I am in favour of higher studies in imprisonment, I

also

support psychological help.

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