You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you. Describe the problem you had with the tickets. Say why you were unhappy with the staff. Suggest what action the train company should take.

Dear Sir, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding an issue I faced with my recently purchased
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. I bought two train
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online a week in advance for the 9:00 a.m. express service from Maple Junction to Kingston.
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, when I arrived at the station, I was informed quite unexpectedly that the travel
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were "invalid"
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a system update, even though they clearly showed the correct date and time. What made the situation considerably worse was the behaviour of your staff. They responded rather dismissively to my concerns and refused to offer any explanation or alternative solution.
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of assisting me politely, they simply asked me to purchase new journey
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at full price, which was extremely frustrating and unprofessional. To resolve
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matter, I strongly urge your company to investigate the technical fault immediately, provide a full refund for the unusable entry
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, and offer staff additional customer-service training.
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steps would undoubtedly prevent similar incidents and restore public confidence in your services. Yours faithfully, Nora

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improvement
Add a clear final line that states what you want now, for example a refund.
structure
Try to keep one idea in one paragraph or separate ideas into new paragraphs.
language
Use easy words and check small mistakes so the tone stays formal.
strength
The letter names the problem clearly.
strength
The tone is polite and formal.
strength
It asks for steps to fix the issue.
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