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The job market today is very competitive and it is best to choose a career or field of study early in order to get a good job later in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world is developing very rapidly, competitiveness among workers is very high and it is considered better to know specialization in earlier ages.
Although
, picking a long life job earlier will not bring the best outcomes.
To begin
 with, people can feel more secure about their future if they choose their jobs from an early age.
For instance
, it is more common
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 society, including parents, teachers, schools, friends and other adults push children in high perspective jobs
such
 as engineering, medicine and computer science. Regarding that, a student will try to maintain basic skills in technology and science. it will probably be more beneficial in the future to know these fields from the school ages. Following that, they will be more proficient than their peers and can show greater results.
However
, children might not understand what they truly like by their own preferences. It can be easy to push a child in the direction of physics or chemistry, but it may become a hardship to learn these high-paid fields. There are lots of students who are fond of art, music and literature.
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, many parents consider it as
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ust hobby and forbid to develop it more broadly because it is not appropriate jobs to lead mature life. Children can not develop knowledge in the field they do not like. Everyone should give young people time for them to realise what really matters. They should try themselves in different hobbies or subjects ti really understand what they prefer more than others. To sum up, having their own experience is better than studying one area for the rest of your life. It is not necessary to choose a jog in young ages, it is more important to find a suitable job.
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