Some people think that children should obey the rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Some people think that children controlled very much cannot deal with problems themselves.

It is important for parents to navigate and guide their children for the betterment of kids future. Some people believe offsprings should be bound within rules of their mentors and parents, while I would argue that kids should be enforced with strict rules and continuously monitored, but that not restrict them from thinking independently. Every generation wishes their children to lead
p
Add an article
a
show examples
icturesque life than them with more comfort and luxury. In the process of journey
Add a comma
,
show examples
elders support and provide guidance to youth to establish their life. Until certain age kids have less ability to think about future consequences so parents decide everything including school, food, clothes, and kids will follow their
teachers
Change to a genitive case
teacher's
teachers'
show examples
words. After
adolescance
Correct your spelling
adolescence
they should have some opportunities to think on their own.
For example
, adults decide on kids stream after their 10th grade based on technology which has
l
Change the article
a
show examples
ot of
scope
Change to a plural noun
scopes
show examples
, but
this
is crucial for youth to decide based on their interests rather than parents or teachers likings.
In addition
to that lot of
tecahers
Correct your spelling
teachers
and parents force their children to be a pro in all fields like sports, studies, dance, singing and many more. These thinkings
makes
Change the verb form
make
show examples
parents feel they are providing all possible options to their child but at
s
Add an article
the
show examples
ame time it's restaining kid to improve on the field which he likes.
For instance
, I was not good at singing
instead
had more interest
towards
Verify preposition usage
in
show examples
painting but my parents tried hard to make me a singer rather than providing additional coaching related to arts. In conclusion,
although
it is prominent for parents to control their kids they should not limit the
opprtunities
Correct your spelling
opportunities
of children by giving
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
show examples
options to think. In my view, after certain age children should decide on their future with little support from parents.
Submitted by amulyauu on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: