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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. to what extend do you agree, give your own opinion

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Today
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orld has been divided into two parts in developing countries and
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industrialised
industrialized
 countries.
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 more debatable when the topic comes to spend money on improvements in health education and trade. I vigorously believe that richer
nation
 should help the poorer
nation
 to improve their infrastructure. In my range, I will give some opinion
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opic.
Firstly
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icher
nation
 should
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 the poorer
nation
 to build their education system and better quality of human resources.Because developed countries have
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 resources than pooer countries.
For instance
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ustralian government give scholarship to Indonesian citizen in
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tudy so they will gather many
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knowledge
 and they will have more
oppertunity
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opportunity
 to involve various countries' people.
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they will have a strong network to other countries. After finishing their study , they will back to their country and could involve in
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ector what they have learnt.
Additionally
, infrastructure should be made in
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different
 isolated areas,
thus
 local people can go somewhere and can do some economic work.
However
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rant from developed countries is very essential for poorer countries in long run.
On the other hand
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ooer citizen can feel that they are
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ependent
nation
. They might hesitate to do some social work as the need. They might fully depend on government like collect their passport, medical insurance, various types of licence
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etcetera
. To sum up, it is very good to have
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rant from developed countries. Because in
this
 way poorer countries will become more developed in many areas and can update the
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quality
 of their lifestyle.
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