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Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea the women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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debat
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debate
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 about who plays an important role
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either father or mother.
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some people
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perceive
 that fathers are playing
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ore important role than mothers as they have the fear of tender's responsibility.I
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completely
 agree with
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 view. In my stance, I will give my opinion regarding
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elow paragraphs.
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predominant
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of
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 the
man
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's role is more
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crucial
 than
woman's
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women
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 is that they inculcate with some skills. As having
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this
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 skills the child will face the reality of the world.
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, mothers will pay more attention to their children. They always protect their children.Due to
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 reason
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the children will not able to face the hurdles they have in their life's.
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, men's have only responsibility to feed their families. After stable in their job or business , they want to expand their families.
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, in Bangladesh,after marriage two years and having the well financial
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status
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 all men are ready to become
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ather.
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, women give more love and care
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compare to the
man
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 so that they deny to take the responsibilities. As
man
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 have the more
resposibility
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responsibility
 they want to grow up their families so they deserve more parenthood than women.
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ladies have some physical problems due to
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 reason they can not contribute themselves in family properly.
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, after giving birth the child they
loses
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 their body strength. To conclude, it can be said that,
man
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have
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 more capabilities to lead their families than woman due
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various type of reasons. As
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they
 have more
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courage
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 to face the world the children will
also
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 cop up with
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 which will help them to build their better development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Equal Parenting
  • 2. Gender Roles
  • 3. Societal Expectations
  • 4. Emotional Well-being
  • 5. Psychological Development
  • 6. Legal Frameworks
  • 7. Workplace Policies
  • 8. Gender Equality
  • 9. Traditional Responsibilities
  • 10. Active Fatherhood
  • 11. Balanced Development
  • 12. Undue Burden
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