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Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Economically successful nations have
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igher number of working hours per day as compared to the nations who are not financially successful.
This
 essay does not agree that average working hours is directly related to countries economy and it will be justified in following paragraphs by submitting arguments
such
 as national policies and natural resources are the key determining factors of a good economy.
First
 and foremost, national policies formed by the government have a huge impact on the ease of doing
business
 scale of a country which
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mount of foreign investment.
Moreover
, its own citizens would not be able to start their ventures if rules and regulations are very stringent.
For instance
,
although
 working hours are more in developing nations
such
 as in India but because of poor performance in ease of doing
business
 index it has not been able to attract investment at large scale as compared to other developed nations with less working hours but
business friendly
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 national policies
such
 as the United State of America.
In addition
 to that, natural resources of a
nation
 have a significant impact on
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its wealth. If a country is rich in some kind of minerals or fossil fuels et cetera than it can create
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wful lot of employment opportunity which can lead to
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inancial wellbeing of the
nation
.
For example
, Dubai is rich in natural resources like oil because of which it has been able to become
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eveloped
nation
 and possess one of the best
economy
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 in the world. To conclude, average working hours of a country is not related to its economic success but other
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such
 as its policies related to
business
 sectors and availability of raw material in abundance are the main deciding factors of
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ealth of a
nation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic success
  • working hours
  • productivity
  • sustainable development
  • work-life balance
  • labor laws
  • efficiency
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • burnout
  • occupational health
  • technological innovation
  • industrialized nations
  • emerging economies
  • workforce
  • competitiveness
  • workplace culture
  • employee turnover
  • quality of life
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