Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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Although

, many people have a difference of opinion about the development of technology, while some believe that with

this

invention public has become less socialized with others. Indeed, I disagree with

this

message because the technological invention has increased the bonding among people. The invention of automation has always been a boon to the public and the world

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because after these discoveries the communication system has become easier than before.

Moreover

, with the introduction of smartphones and internet life has become very smooth and moving at a faster pace.

Furthermore

, through social media like Instagram, Facebook and Twitter, nowadays people are interacting more frequently with others than in the past.

For instance

, a photo, video or

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status through any of the social media websites can reach people within

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raction of seconds, unlike the olden days, where the photo albums may take more time to reach our kith and kin.

On the other hand

, in the olden days or maybe a decade ago people have to wait for the

day’s newspaper or for

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news updates on radio and television to know about the previous day details.

However

, through the progression in mechanization

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the current affairs in the nook and corner of the world can be known within a short span of time.

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, with

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improvisation

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the bridge between the rich- and poor-class people has

also

been broken and everybody is treated equally. Indeed, through

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progression nowadays people are talking and chatting more time with their parents, relatives and friends and communication became user-friendly.

For example

, previously people used to write letters to those who are living outside the country or house and it would reach them after 10-14 days, but now through a video call, people can converse many hours with their relatives or friends who are out of the country. In conclusion, the improvisation in technology and automation has always made

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life easier and people are able to converse with others without any discomfort.

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has always been a blessing to

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human life made people terrible.

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