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Some people believe that teaching music in schools is a vital part of growing up and the human experience, whilst others believe that teaching music in schools is a waste of time and resources. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Learning
music
 contributes significantly to student’s upbringing and development, according to certain people.
However
, some would consider it useless and
unsignificant
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insignificant
. I think schools should teach
music
 because it has valuable benefits that cannot
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 in other subjects.
Music
 has a positive impact on
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children development. It helps students to be more creative and inventive because it broadens their horizons. Scientific subjects only restrict students minds toward matters related to science and math. Not only does
music
 teach
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tudent how to think out of the box but
also
 it helps them to understand others’ emotions and beliefs. A study made by Oxford University found that 76% of students who learn
music
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igher level of emotional intelligence than those who
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 not learn it.
Hence
, playing musical instruments play a pivotal role in shaping student personality. Those opposed to
this
 say that
music
 can not add any value to a student’s academic progress. Some parents believe that playing
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musical instruments could distract their children’s attention from their studies.
This
 perspective has stemmed from the fact that most of the jobs are controlled by those who did well in scientific subjects. If school allocates more resources for
music
, it will affect negatively the education process. The Sunday Times reported recently that only 10% of musician succussed in creating a reputable career for themselves.
However
, focusing only on teaching the scientific courses would isolate students from connecting with their innate feelings and made them feel like machines. In conclusion,
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 learning
music
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tudent to learn more about his personality and feeling , others argue that it is utterly a waste of time. I think
music
 should be added to the academic curriculum because it expands
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upil’s mind.
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