Some say that university students must only learn science and technology. While others believe that they should learn what they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whilst some argue that every student in the
univerisities
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universities
should choose only
science
and technology as a
subject
, others hold that they should opt the subjects as per their interests. I reckon that pupils in the universities should read and learn subjects as per their interest. Both views will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
First
and foremost, with the advent of latest technologies and innovations human's life
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become much easier than what was before.
As a result
, demands for employees with the knowledge of
science
has increased steeply and there are
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lethora of
job
options for them with lucrative offers.
Hence
, every guardian
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their children to learn these subjects for
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better future
job
perspectives.
For instance
, studies show that approximately 90% of students with the
science
degree received a
job
offer within a year of their graduation while other
subject
students had to wait for 3-4 years. On contrary, according to others
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student should have the freedom to read and learn any
subject
of their choice.
Furthermore
, making any
subject
compulsory would put
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extra pressure on the students who are not interested in those subjects.
As a result
, their performance will be hampered. To exemplify, it has been found in the latest studies that students who have selected their
subject
of interest in the graduation are much
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happier and are doing much better in their fields as compared to those who were forced to choose subjects. To conclude,
although
students with degrees in
science
and technology are having more
job
options with big offers, they should not be forced to learn any
subject
they
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do not
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nterest,
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their performance will be decreased significantly.
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