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Some say that university students must only learn science and technology. While others believe that they should learn what they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whilst some argue that every student in the universities should choose only
science
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 and technology as a
subject
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, others hold that they should opt the subjects as per their interests. I reckon that pupils in the universities should read and learn subjects as per their interest. Both views will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
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 and foremost, with the advent of latest technologies and innovations human's life has become much easier than what was before.
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, demands for employees with the knowledge of
science
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 has increased steeply and there are a plethora of
job
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 options for them with lucrative offers.
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, every guardian wants their children to learn these subjects for better future
job
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 perspectives.
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, studies show that approximately 90% of students with the
science
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 degree received a
job
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 offer within a year of their graduation while other
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 students had to wait for 3-4 years. On contrary, according to others
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every graduate student should have the freedom to read and learn any
subject
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 of their choice.
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, making any
subject
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 compulsory would put extra pressure on the students who are not interested in those subjects.
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, their performance will be hampered. To exemplify, it has been found in the latest studies that students who have selected their
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 of interest in the graduation are much happier and are doing much better in their fields as compared to those who were forced to choose subjects. To conclude,
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 students with degrees in
science
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 and technology are having more
job
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 options with big offers, they should not be forced to learn any
subject
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 they do not have an interest,
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, their performance will be decreased significantly.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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