The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The debate over the optimal aim of science has sparked considerable controversy.
While
some argue that scientific research should solely favour political prospects, I, Linking Words
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others, contend that it is most effective for society if science focuses on improving Linking Words
people
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ambition is the happiness of the country it brings about. By leading an enhanced version of life, society enjoys financial stability Linking Words
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innovative
tackleing
economic issues that scientific research has introduced. Correct your spelling
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, whilst having a boosted mental state, Linking Words
people
credit scientists for their satisfactory lives. Use synonyms
This
appreciation will serve as an incentive, fostering a sense of accomplishment in scientist and Linking Words
ameliorate
their life satisfaction rates as well, ultimately contributing to a harmonious and delightful community. Wrong verb form
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for instance
, many researchers have reported that they find their contributions to society highly rewarding since the country Linking Words
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the economic recovery, highlighting Change preposition
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prospect's profound impact at not only societal but Linking Words
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personal and financial levels.
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On the other hand
, some may claim that the resources and scientific attention should be dedicated to governments' aims Linking Words
such
as conquering other nations. They assume when scientists put adequate effort into constructing war instruments Linking Words
such
as atomic bombs, they have a greater likelihood of achieving an edge on a global scale by winning in wars. Linking Words
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, they argue that the occupation of other countries Correct your spelling
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result
in prosperity and economic upturn. Change the verb form
results
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wartime, not allocating much time and effort into making war machines which has heightened their chance of losing Change preposition
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the war and a subsequent economic recession. Change preposition
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this
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such
efforts come at the cost of Linking Words
people
's lives, including indigenous ones.
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although
some tend to focus solely on devoting all the scientific attention to boosting countries' global status, I firmly believe that countries would be a more conducive place for individual, societal, and financial development if taking enhancing the lives of others into account when Linking Words
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scientific subjects.Correct your spelling
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