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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Social media has infiltrated into everyone’s life and is believed to be replacing direct
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 advantageous in certain aspects, is generally a detriment to true human
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 in the long run. On the one hand, I recognize some benefits brought about by social media.
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, they facilitate
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 in modern times as now people can globally connect with old friends and relatives or with others who share common interests.
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, individuals can use Facebook to interact with others by sharing posts and pictures about their personal lives, make a video call at no cost.
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, study sessions are frequently happening on social networking websites through live streaming services, which allows learners around the world have free access to online classes on
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, I think online networking sites pose more threats to human’s safety and interpersonal relationships. As these sites are becoming more and more dominant and attract large numbers of new users every day, people can fall prey to online
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 abuse,
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 as online bullying and harassment. In fact, social networking websites can become a toxic environment where users can be verbally assaulted because there are only a few rules, most of which are spoken rules rather than established guidelines, that restrict hateful or abusive contents.
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, overuse of social media to communicate can lead to people downplaying the importance of face-to-face interaction on which true human relationships thrive. Nowadays, many young and reclusive users prefer living in a virtual world on social sites than engaging in real-life relationships.
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 may have serious mental effects,
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 as increased stress, anxiety and loneliness. In conclusion, the downsides of social media replacing face-to-face interaction are more significant than the benefits users could reap from those sites.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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