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Some believe that it is parents who should teach their children to recycle waste while others feel schools are more responsible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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We all agree that recycling is one of the crucial steps of environmental protection.
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ifferent attitude toward it. Some think that parents should be responsible for that whereas others think schools should take it .
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 ,home is where we all grow up , so is where education begins. Parents are our best teachers before we go to school. They should teach their children that what earth to
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uman being is what home to us. We love our home so we should protect them by lessening waste produced in our daily life.
This
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 shows a good model for cherishing things we have rather than taking them for granted. After that , we receive school education , which causes great influence in our life. Schooling is essential to us. Teachers are responsible for educating every student to be a better person in their life. To achieve
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, courses are designed to cultivate students with the idea of being eco-friendly.
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, having student aware of pollution is as important as recycling so that they know the importance of reducing trash and reusing plastic containers. By doing so , people can effectively cut down the waste the produce every year. In my opinion, recycling is a lesson that everyone who lives on
this
 planet must learn.
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, both parents and schools are all fully responsible for teaching children how to recycle, by sharing loads in two phases. Before school , parents set a good model for their sons and daughters to imitate and learn . After they reach schooling age , teachers and schools
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therefore
 explain the reason why we have to do recycling, which can make kid comprehend the reason behind every choice we made.
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