IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #life #history #source #information
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Human
life
Use synonyms
 is full of suspense and experiences. Few believe there is nothing to learn from past days while
other
Replace the word
others
show examples
 see past days as a
path way
Correct your spelling
pathway
show examples
 for the future. In my opinion, history provides a safe guideline to the future. I shall describe the details in the essay.
Firstly
Linking Words
, people are busy with
day
Use synonyms
today
Correct your spelling
to day
show examples
life
Use synonyms
 and
gets
Change the verb form
get
show examples
 limited time to rework and analyse on what has been completed.
For example
Linking Words
, a software engineer works for more than 8 hrs a
day
Use synonyms
 while they finish their works, they are really tired to look back and find an accomplishment and its usages.
In other words
Linking Words
, every
day
Use synonyms
 comes up with new tasks where previous
day
Use synonyms
 task is of least preference and priority to today's activity.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the time constraint for each work keeps them occupied with less time to preview on
last
Linking Words
day
Use synonyms
 actions.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
,
information
Use synonyms
 is always a vital source
in
Verify preposition usage
of
show examples
 human
life
Use synonyms
. For an illustration, doctors gain knowledge on
d
Add an article
the
show examples
isease and cure through books that
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
 recorded with the experience and practice. Unless
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
these
Change the determiner
this information
show examples
information
Use synonyms
 were not
troved
Correct your spelling
proved
provided
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
every trial and error would have taken
thousand
Correct your spelling
thousands
show examples
 of
life
Use synonyms
's leading to the controversy of medicine and science development.
Moreover
Linking Words
, it would have been far away from today's establishment.
In addition
Linking Words
, all the
information
Use synonyms
 collected, recorded and shared in every
aspects
Change to a singular noun
aspect
show examples
 are a reference guide which is meant to be taken forward in
r
Add an article
the
show examples
ight direction to avoid mistakes and faults. In conclusion, history is an important source of
information
Use synonyms
 owing
Add the preposition
to
show examples
the advantages more than disadvantages to human
life
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by shyambala85 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: