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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.

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The given diagram demonstrates the different steps of manufacturing of bricks for the construction sector. Overall, the process can be divided into two main headings moulding and heating of the bricks.
First
 and foremost, clay is extracted from the source by digging by a digger. Now, it is placed over the roller on
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 metal grid which separated the impurities from the clay.
Subsequently
, water and sand are mixed with the clay to make bricks either by moulding or by wire cutting. Proceeding with the details of
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econd stage, bricks are placed in the oven for drying, for 24-48 hours.
Thereafter
, it is kept in the kiln at moderate (200-980 degree Celsius) and
then
 at high temperature (870-1300 degree Celsius). Now, they are placed inside a cooling chamber for approximately 48-72 hours.
Finally
, bricks are ready now and kept at one place for packaging before delivering them to building industries.
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