Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree ?

In the 21st century,
people
have seen numerous ups and downs. These oscillations of
life
have left many
people
homeless either because of loss in business or
cause
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because
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of debt. To help the homeless
people
, it is argued that giving them
money
will help them. I strongly stand against
this
notion. In
this
essay, why providing homeless
people
money
, do nothing to encourage them to change their
life
and
instead
of helping them to earn on their
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own do good will be discussed.
To begin
with,
people
without homes should be helped to get work and handing over the
money
should be avoided.
Additionally
, persons who lost their houses are generally in mild depression
due to
their situation. whilst offering them cash is a good deed, leaving no other motivating factor to improve their status quo.
For instance
, one who gets the capital out of empathy will not work for it and continuously seek others to give him
fund
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funds
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thus
, his situation remains unchanged.
Therefore
, helping the homeless by giving them
money
does not help to encourage them to transform their
life
.
Furthermore
, the
money
giving
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away to houseless
one’s
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ones
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will be spent on socially unacceptable activities like gambling and consumption of alcohol
due to
their mental instability.
Moreover
, getting homeless is depressing in itself and if they get cash without any hard work will go
in
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into
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either gambling or drinking. Alternatively, they must be helped to earn their own bread and butter
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their mental stress positively.
For example
, homeless
people
who were rehabilitated into society by organisations lead a more productive
life
as compared to those who do not.
Hence
,
people
without a roof over their
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heads
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head
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should be helped to make an earning rather than giving away
money
. In summary, in my opinion, giving cash to
homeless
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the homeless
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will do no better to them mentally and even they will dwell
into
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in
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the scenario
due to
alcoholism.
However
, they must be helped by other means to get back to normal lives.
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