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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter, 1. Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job. 2. Say what else you could do for the family. 3. Give your reasons for wanting the job.

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Dear Sir, I am writing in response to your advertisement on
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 online blog in search of a teacher for your offspring. I am keen to serve as a
turtor
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tutor
 for your children. I think am
best
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 match for
this
 job considering my qualification and other skills.
Firstly
, I have
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 good command
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French
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 language which you are looking for.
Secondly
, my schedule of work
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your requirement as I will be able to instruct your children in the afternoon from 4pm to 6pm.
Furthermore
, I am very much affectionate to the youngsters and have
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 to work as a
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. Apart
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 the aforementioned causes, I can look after your home during
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 as both of you will be at work
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 that time.
Besides
, I will
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take care
 of your pets as I
also
 have expertise in
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. I am really anticipated to appoint for
this
 job because I am a student and I
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 to have
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suitable part-time employment to finance my education. In these circumstances, I humbly request you to select me for
this
 employment. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Taslima
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • TESOL certification
  • Experience in teaching children
  • Knowledge of Australian culture
  • Passion for language education
  • Flexible and adaptable
  • Design customized lesson plans
  • Patient and understanding
  • Strong communication skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Participate in family activities
  • Enthusiasm for cultural exchange
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