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Some people think they have right to use as much freshwater as they want. Others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your option.

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Water
 is an essential source of humans’ lives. But there are a lot of people who waste unnecessarily freshwater whereas only a few insist that governments should take actions to solve
this
 problem. In
this
 essay, I will explain both views. On the one hand, there is no legal restriction on
water
 usage in many countries.
Therefore
, many people consume
water
 recklessly without noticing the consequences.
For instance
, people generally forget to turn off taps when they are not in use.
Besides
, there are only a few people who realize the importance of freshwater in some nations.
This
 is because governments will supply
water
 consistently as long as citizens can pay money for
water
 bills. So, people complain that they have rights to spend as much freshwater as they want.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of continents that are suffering from a shortage of
freshwater
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.
Therefore
, people from those places utilize
water
 effectively and they even exhort governments to handle the issue of wasting
water
. With legal enforcement, they point out that there will be a significant drop in
water
 consumption.
Furthermore
, the
water
 crisis is an international concern and it is difficult to handle
this
 crisis without early control of
water
 by governments.
For example
, the government of Singapore achieve a sustainable level of
water
 consumption by taking the commitment and participation of society. In conclusion, I strongly agree that there will be a lot of
water
 demand in our world unless governments will take actions by applying tight laws.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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